Quote Originally Posted by teigyr View Post
Or do I need to do the "hit over the head" style of: Examples of Diversity in Community Involvement include.....
I don't know the committee composition, but I favor the "hit over the head" approach.

Why? Because:
  • unless they have a strong conviction, these committees tend to consist of people who are busy,
  • therefore, at best, they may "skim" the information before the meeting...
  • so, they need help to get focused.


So:
  • too many words are bad,
  • but bullet points provide lots of "white space" on the page and tend to focus the reader attention and disposition.


PS: You can't overthink communication on these things...you only get one shot, so you have to be strategic. I encourage you to think of the readers and write with their perceptions in mind. Have someone unfamiliar with the organization read your package to see if they can get the vision you're trying to create.